Sparda Posted June 29, 2004 Posted June 29, 2004 ~Hey this is my first post and kinda my first poem (finished poem atleast) any way please reply and tell me what you think thanx~ Edited to remove blatant plagiarism.
Grib Posted July 1, 2004 Posted July 1, 2004 This is a beautiful poem Sparda and one I can relate to very much. I kinda guess I have had a lot more of life than yourself. I have become cynically bitter and twisted although copious amounts of lager does help. To me, I would have expanded on the You took your bow and arrow,And aimed it at my heart. You let it rip right through my soul, And left me torn apart. A bit (or a lot) of blood and guts often helps to grab people's attention, if it's attention what you want. You can always then end a poem with a few nice things to even it all up.
Stavros Posted July 1, 2004 Posted July 1, 2004 Or you could email Katherine James and tell her how much you like to claim her work as your own! http://www.netpoets.com/poems/teenlove/0297005.htm Stav.
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